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> Bigi: Woah this place is great for training! Glad me and Rang found it before someone else did, now to clear that other tree over there.
One of our main protagonist Bigi ( Age: 14) is clearing away a section in the forest for him and his cousin Rang to train in, as you can see he's had prior experience in martial arts which he shows by chopping down the last remaining trees there with precise kicks.
But as the saying goes, " True warriors must always be at their peak,"- Kung fu panda
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You clearly have a desire to tell a unique story, i'd try to post full comic pages and word them, if possible your pages can be inked and scanned onto a flash drive at your local library (this is how i first did Rise Against!) I'm liking what I read so far.
Practice more, and try to make their words more legible. I'm not the best speller in the world so i really cant talk (xD) but you can write their texts in a notebook, then add them to the page when you've settled on what you want them to say.
Also refrain from using pop culture refferences in your story as it almist implies they are in the same universe (unless they are) this is for that kung fu panda line, perhaps create a legendary martial artist that rang apsires to be like and give hime philisophical sayings that rang lives by.
Okay i'm done with my critiques, now to enjoy the story!